Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * (Continued) The flower’s followed her. Get rid of the apostrophe. The way his nose looked when he sneered made him ...

Sureal : Okay, glad Fred's actions were 'realistic', had a bit of trouble with that. That you for pointing out the errors, they'll be fixed once I'm ... not so ...

*falls off chair* Jack : I really didn't expect that! Your hints are helpful and also brought a few questions to mind, but this will probably gather an inch of ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * He had been awul again, brushing me off when all I wanted was to talk to him. ‘awul’ = awful I knew he ...

First off, thank you a million times and I reward you with cookies or whatever you fancy. I do like the ending of The Beginning though, I'm a fan of ...

Green = Comment Black = Review * Fakir awoke at dawn. He stood, stretched and looked around him at the thirteen or so still-sleeping forms. He kicked one of them. ...

Ari/Trident : Thank you for reading and the comments. I hope I've covered most of the errors with the new revision and if anyone else wants to add anything further ...

I look forward to reading the revised version (I just hope your teacher realises what he is missing out on) and this new piece.

I'll have to edit this over the weekend. Which city are you from Ani? And thanks for reading.

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I let father pass and helped to steady his weight by allowing him to lean on my left shoulder, while ...

No problem. Everything egts rewritten anyway, I do that a lot after taking a look at my plots and the characters change things too. As before, keep me updated on ...

Sam : Thank you for reading and your comments! The main thing, in my opinion, would just be to explain the characters' relations to one another. I think you missed ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * It was a subject rarely spoken of and never mentioned except in the sunny clearing were Boom lived. ‘were’ = where Bellow him, ...

Jack : *falls over* Thanks so much for the critique, you've picked up things I easily miss. I hate the word 'said' but I try to use it more often ...

With a tree trunk through my head! Wouldn't you be dead? And how thick is the trunk compared to the head?