Myth

Greatest Jig and Imp : Thank you both so much for tearing Harpies up. I've finally got what I wanted from the very beginning. Changes will be made, and I ...

I love everything by Garth Nix. I've still got to read Wednesday and Thursday .

Royboy : Hello. Um.. now that I look at it I'm not too sure. 'live' sounds right. Thank you for reading, and the compliment and I hope I can critique ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * She sat down, gesturing at the girl to do it also . ... gesturing for the girl to follow suit? ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Pain. Unbearable, intolerable… Pain. Overflowing, overwhelming… This is just an idea. Why not have the above in italics, it seems ...

Shafter : Yay! My 'twin' who has picked up things I've disregarded. Thank you for spending time to look over the prologue, as I've said in my PM you can ...

I seem to have forgotten some parts of the earlier story, I'll go to reading it and if I find anything I'll point it out. :D

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Its fur was reddish-brown, its four paws and brushy tail-tip black as if they had been dipped in paint. Was ...

Frabjous Imp : Your suggestion makes sense, mine confuses me too XD Thank you ever so much for reading :mrgreen: *bows a couple of times* Changes have been made, hopefully ...

Yay! Fun book! I loved it and have all three in my shelf. *treasures her copies*

Have you tried critiquing first? That way other people will read your work.

Luna : Thank you for reading, I think the 'that' would be better, I didn't realise it was a bit awkward to read.

Sari : Thanks for reading. I don't think I understand what you said for the second paragraph but I'll make changes. This was just to introduce the character, I may ...

Thanks for the help, I've edited it as best as I could.

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * As he started to walk to wards the turbolift at the end of the corridor, he felt a tap on ...