Myth

It changes from the monk, to the boatman and then to Masus?

I read that book, it was .. awful .. The Magic Finger and Fantastic Mr Fox are my favourites.

Yes, linearise is a read word. If I had to chose between the two I would say Raptor, most of the time I like the villians but there is not ...

LOL, I've done that before with a few of my characters, people think my female characters are boys with a girls name.

After minutes the man in monk’s robes opened his eyes and gasped for air. Just say Spero otherwise it looks a little long winded. He flicked the dagger once and ...

Thank you everyone for your help. I don'y usually write like this, most of my work are 'simple' and I just wanted to try and see if I could make ...

Sebastian woke to the sound of excited chatter. The other three boys, John, Byron and Percy were already getting dressed. He lay on his back for a while and then ...

I'd appreciate it if it was done from beginning to end unless you've read the start.

Is it possible for someone to critique this? I don't mind if you do it in parts or a full one, I really need help on how to improve this ...

I loved that book especially the story of Henry Sugar, my teacher read it to us and I just had to read it all over again, I think I'll borrow ...

Thank you so much! I always have a little trouble with this but it really shouldn't be because I know someone who went through what Wind Rider is experiencing so ...

Thanks for the help. I wrote this from my point of view, and when seeing the girl get bullied reminds me of what used to happen to me so all ...

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Could someone critique this please? I need help on changing this as I'm not any good at poetry.

I've edited this and changed a few things if anyone wants to add comments you are welcome to. :D