Myth

Oh I see. I'm one of those people afraid of clowns..

Questions: Serjeant. Was that intentionally misspelled? And can you describe blood being stale? Well, 'Serjeant' is an older spelling of Sergeant, so I think I remember you mentioning you're from ...

I love the flashback. It shows Shan’s downfall but is ruined because you could have done it on its own. When I say that you could have written it as ...

Shan sighed and put his head down, feeling the beginnings of a headache pounding back behind his eyes. He pushed his fingers through his soaking hair and leaned back in ...

Always welcome. :D If you think its necessary then you should keep it otherwise ditch it, but its really up to you.

Well, I hope it comes along well for ya... as soon as it gets sorted out. ^_^ It was a great read, you're not allowed to give it up. :wink: ...

Poor boy. He knew what was going on around him and just wanted to play outside. That is so sad, as I can just imagine him sitting in the chair. ...

Yay! Thank you very much. It's my first historical fiction piece in like... five years. Eep. It's been too long. XD Five years...? And you write so well. He wanted ...

You're welcome. If you re-post be sure to let me know. :D

So where is this piece set in Denmark? Once again, congratulations Wiggy! :D

I'll take a look again and give a few suggestions. QotH is on hold at the moment, I want to get a few things sorted first. :D

I quite liked this though I'd agree with Snoink on giving Corrode a bit more actions to show his feelings. I did get a lonely feel from this, so good ...

As a fan of music I really loved this. the descriptions were right and the music almost played into my ears. This brings up questions like whi is this girl ...

A nice flowy poem. I love the first stanza, especially: it carves its way through earth and trees, continuing to make beautiful tangled webs

Great start to a story Fand. I enjoyed reading that, I hope Elin gets back at Gerard! Like Niamh I can't find anything to critique. I hope you write more ...