Myth

Sureal : Thank you for reading! :D I didn't want to go into too much detail what the background of mages and their magic was, I need help on that.

Thank you for reading Lexy. You've reminded me to update this. :D

Rikki : Thanks for taking the time to read. I guess Imp roused all the questions but if you do find anything 'out of line' let me know. :D

Where does Aero say he could write better than the writer? He was critiquing to help out as best he could.

This reminds me of the time I was afraid of the dark. The first paragraph drew my attention and from there I couldn't avert my eyes, I just had to ...

Nice one Snoink! Addie is great! :D

Thanks Jack. :D My lack of description depresses me now as at the time I thought I had made a few things clear. Well.. editing is always a good thing. ...

RS : Thanks for taking the time to read through. 1st part : I didn't want to go into too much detail what the world looked like. I tend to ...

I love the Magic and Myth section. :wink:

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Guess who's back? :D * Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I crouched low to the stone floor. At the moment it felt more like ice, ...

Aero (mind if I call you that?): As ever, I'm glad to see a critique from you and very pleased that you found it interesting. Sorry I made you feel ...

And growing where? From the clouds onto the field? What clouds? The rushes are orange plants on the field, I didn't add anything about clouds as I was describing the ...

Ha ha! Very funny CL! Like Jack, I’m not sure what the plot is exactly but these soldiers(?) on a planet.

Thank you, Myth. :wink: I always look forward to your comments. Seriously, I do. They help very much. :D You're most welcome. Hope this next critique helps. :D * Green ...