Myth

I think the shoes is/are my favourite character. Her voice is so real, and I can now see why Samantha corrects her mistakes from all that reading. She is like ...

I have only two things to point out: you’ve spelt ‘laid’ wrong—layed—and there are a couple of times you missed putting Atlantia in italics. Apart from that I really don’t ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * But as soon as the big hand was on the twelve and the little hand was on the fifteen, that ...

The ellipses are so annoying. How can all the characters know the one sentence started by a fellow warrior[?] and they all say "Damn" at the end too? Something you ...

My sister did it for class so I borrowed it off her. It was all right, but I prefer Michael's others books such as Kensuke's Kingdom and The Butterfly Lion ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Taking a long gulp of coffee, I turned the page. I don’t think you can take a ‘long’ gulp of coffee. His stringy ...

I’m not too sure which chapters come first, they all have the same title, but could you please number them one, two and three, etc? It would be helpful and ...

Try not to use capital letters as you did for: “NO!” The exclamation pretty much shows her shouting or her shock. Sometimes you capitalise Internet and other times you don’t, ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The clock ticked on, perpetually at quarter to 3 . Please write numbers out. “ Uhhh… Mr. Mopel? May I ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * "NO!" You should avoid capital letters when shouting, the exclamation mark shows the character is angry, etc. " [t] hink ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * It was a weary day, just off the coast of London , far from all the notorious aristocrats. Does London have a coast? ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * As if in a deep dream, he pushed the door open to reveal a blurry image of a short man ...

Hello! I felt the pub entrance was clichéd, silence while everyone took in her experience and then discussing her. It has been done often, so I think you could come ...

Hello! Noticed a few typos and spelling mistakes in there. Also, remember to add a paragraph for each new speaker, a couple of times you had Wiggins and Tobey speaking ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Mariel sat slumped against the bar, on her usual stool at the far end of the room, and, Glory noted ...