Myth

‘prince’s’ doesn’t need the apostrophe as you are talking about more than one prince. “Qatar, why is it taking so long,” This is a question, it should end with a ...

Okaay Dreamy! This reminds me A LOT about a mental hospital I visited last year. I don't know if anyone found this a tiny bit creepy, especially when Louisa smiled, ...

“Get dressed.” His voice carried, although the masterful tone had gone, it was a joyous tone. ‘tone’ is repeated, since you’re stating the voice had changed you could say ‘it ...

I didn't like Jane Eyre much, though I did feel sorry for her when she attened boarding school (was it?). I read a shortened version of it so I may ...

Right, this is the crit from TSR. “That sucks. Jason and me will be there as soon as possible. Jason and I will be there as soon as possible. Just ...

I love the atmosphere you created in the parade, specially all the streamers and colours etc. I really thought Crystalia was the assassin at the start until I read further ...

On a busy commercial street there was a shop. It was tucked away between larger buildings, secluded and dark. Out of the flow of commuters, stepped a tall man in ...

The alley cat ran from the sight of it back to its lair on the wall, curiously it kept watching. Wouldn't this be 'back to its lair in the wall' ...

The weather outside the car was grey, and it looked like it would start raining before the day was done. Somehow that sounded… wrong. Something along the line of ‘It ...

Often the poorer people were picked to be servants at birth for the Count’n’Countess. Count and Countess, the way you've written it is not exactly 'proper' unless that's what people ...

Rashtara’s fiery eyes glared at the chaos that ravaged below her small stone cottage that was built beside a large yawning cave entrance that led to the upper levels of ...

You write very well for someone that young, I certainly counldn't have written like that at your age. There is one sentence that I didn't really understand: Then the fair ...

You've been giving me these looks That no one has gave me before That just seemed wrong, I have two suggestions for that line: One You've been giving me these ...

perhaps many centuries-impossibly long or a fraction of a second. He had no sense of time or of anything, for the matter. There should be a space between 'centuries' and ...

Wow, compared to your room my own room is quite small but with the same things in it, so as Blob said its a very realistic description. The egg... I ...