Myth

Anikyru jumped 30 feet, cartwheeling and spinning, before right in front of the Llama . A word or two missing there. Yay! The llama survived! Strange how a llama could ...

You should definitely continue. I'm curious to know why the blood is black, why Alex is sick and what he is changing into (suggestion from subtitle). I don't see many ...

He glided through the dark like a ill-defined shadow until he came to his destination: the singular bed. From under the patched quilt he spied an uneven mound. … the ...

men in pressed white lab coasts huddled around a ... men in pressed white lab coats ... No! You can't take away green - my favourite colour! Wow! Imagine someone ...

CL, I want to read more yet I don't know if more is good. I like Andy, or maybe I'm a sucker to all main characters. Sometimes, looking in a ...

Those once-content, gray-blue pools had a hunted look to them, like he had searched long for something but never found it. Was that meant to be 'hunted' or 'haunted'? Hoorah ...

All that remained of our faces as we encircled the pit was the shadow that revealed only a dim aura of light; was this reality, or was it truth? Wouldn’t ...

I would love for this to continue and don't need to repeat what Niamh and Snoink have said. Description will create images in your readers mind and without them they ...

Because of the corn I was reminded of Children of the Corn . Michael doesn't like the corns very much does he? And I wouldn't really blame him. You kept ...

“Mistress Neya,” a timid voice called from across the suite. It was her servant Mioka. She turned to look at Mioka immediately; Mioka kneeled and pressed her head into the ...

The torturers hand became a fist just before he felt his throat being choked. There is only one torturer so there should be an apostrophe between r and s: torturer’s. ...

Erm, I meant this: Finally, in sixth grade, I attempted my most difficult project yet-writing a historical fiction, forty page novel, located in Denmark during World War II. Due to ...

You're welcome, Fishr. And the Redcoat part, I've always seen it capitalised so I'm not too sure. Anyway, on to my crit. After a few seconds of my mind racing, ...

Hello Dreamer! At last I've had time to re-read. There are a few typos you can look over through careful reading - if you want them pointed out I'll do ...

“Your late.” Said the angry voice of a woman. You’re late. “I had a hard time getting away.” The man responded cooly. I think you meant ‘coolly’. “Whatever. You’re here ...