Myaku

I liked this very much. The only thing I found awkward was the line about the fangs, but that has been stated before. Good job.

I liked this, but I was confused the entire time. Was the narrator dead? Was he alive? Was he a ghost?

Hah! Brilliant!

I like what you have so far but it feels like this is unfinished. The last line does not feel like it should end there.

Beautifully written, really creates an image in the mind. Very sad as well but still flows and is well crafted.