MuffinMunch

Okay, so. Awesomesauce. I only have, like, really little comments. First, I have no idea what time period it's in...like, I assume it's a really long time ago, because a ...

You're inconsistent about the tense. She has a rounded face and a pretty straight nose. Her hair’s crimson red color appeared bloodlike in contrast to her skin "She has a ...

Okay, this was amazing. Very few things that I have problems with. SporkPunk already listed a few of them (and, SporkPunk, I just have to say that I really love ...

I'm kind of upset at you for making it so short. I've only been on here for a little while and I'm having a really hard time finding things I ...

I couldn't read the whole thing because it's not really the kind of thing I'm interested in and it was a little slow for me, but it was better written ...

It's kinda a bit much. I think it could stand to be stretched out a bit; it's a little too much information for such a little amount of text and ...

Yeah, I like it so far, as much as I can, since that was so little. But you do have some run-ons and one time you forgot to capitalize (though ...