MrWitz

I like how well you crafted the story. I also like how many facts you included per paragraph like how they had mahogany wood, the story behind carps. There were ...

I like how strong it started of and then died down suddenly to hook you onto the story. I kind of like how you listed the characters but if you ...

I like that ylu started the story off strong. I did notice a mistake when you said "Ju said to Gang that day. “Our son needs some kind of school. ...

I like that it shows you knowledge of China as you wrote the story. I liked how well shape it was and felt like a story. I think you did ...