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Re: dolphin marriage
Hey Conrad! I actually kind of like this. I agree with Kammie that your idea is pretty bland and overused, but you've managed to bring some imagery-for-the-soul to the table ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Cast in Fire REVISION
Hi there! I do think this poem is nice, but it needs something extra. As Aqua said, your rhyming isn't the worst, but it could definitely use some improvement. For ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Death's Riddle
Hey Conrad! I have to say, this is really good. I can't find much to critique in this, which surprises me. The dialogue is completely realistic and believable, and your ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Blood and Fire [Critiques very much welcome!]
Hey Lisa! I'm here to review as requested. I'm going to have to agree with Coco on this one; your story could use some work. I don't think it's super-horrible ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Third Degree [Bonding with Elijah]
Hey Typist! I have to say, this was really good. Throughout the whole thing, I was dying to find out what the issue was between Phoenix and Jett; I think ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Foreshame
Hi there Lady! I definitely agree that you need to proofread; Lowercase "I's" are completely unnecessary and definitely distract the reader. As for the actual idea behind this poem, I'm ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Tears of Blood
Hi King! I'm here to review. So...your poem. I'm not really feeling it. Well, I'm definitely feeling something , but it's not admiration or respect for this; it's irritation. Mild ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: We all believe in something... (Cassie)
Rock, why did you delete this? I was kind of excited to read it, and I'll assume it was for the contest? If you got bad reviews, that's still no ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Sea Of Green
Hi! I'm here to review. :D If I'm being honest, this poem needs some work. It's very rant-y and drawn-out at parts, and I get no sense of flow as ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: A Step Into Darkness (A Series of Three Poems)
Hey Dante. I'm going to be your reviewer. Before I even start on this, you need to know that this entry is probably way too long. Any one of these ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: He's Gone Country - excerpt
Hey Typist! I'm here to review your awesome story! Yes, it is indeed awesome. In a sad, disappointing kind of way, but it's awesome nonetheless. I love it when stories ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Voices
Hey Lil_Pau! I have to say, this is pretty cool. :D Your use of vivid, contrasting images makes for a rather epic lyrical poem. I can definitely tell that this ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Celibate
For the second time today, I'm left feeling a little confused. Is the narrator pro-celibacy or anti-celibacy? It's all sort of jumbled together and somewhat ranty. Also, I don't feel ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Swept Away -- Flyleaf Contest!
*judged* I really loved this! I'll admit that this is definitely a contender for first place! You've brought a whole different dimension to the meaning of the song, and for ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Lonely When you Left
This was kind of strange for me. At first, I like it, because the flow was smooth and your rhyming scheme didn't seem so forced. After the first stanza, however, ...
Jun 1, 2010
