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  • Poetry » General, General Re: It will be a morning burial.

    This is an awesome poem. It really shows another view on death that we barely get to see. I love your metaphor at the end, and just the whole entire ...

    Sep 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: control freak

    Wow. It sounded like slam poetry to me. I had a rhythm going for a while, but then it seemed to lose it as it went on, which was kinda ...

    Sep 18, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, Other Re: Coffee Stains

    I liked this a lot! I can't really find any faults with it at all. It turned out marvelously, and your use of language was perfect in just the right ...

    Aug 20, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: The Place I Love

    Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

    Aug 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: The Place I Love

    Thank you for that. I'm glad you said it like that!

    Aug 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: The Place I Love

    Aw! Thanks!

    Aug 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: The Place I Love

    Thank you for the criticisms! This has been an end product for a while, but I may go back and edit it. I had actually originally written this to include ...

    Aug 10, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Where I'm From

    This is very bittersweet. I like how you pose the hope against the sadness of things like your "father's goodbye". I like how personal this poem is. Sometimes it's really ...

    Jul 28, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, Realistic Re: I Imagined Death

    That was really amazing. My favorite part was ... and all of those maggots had my name because he’d always said that I would destroy him, and he was always ...

    Jul 27, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Other Re: Blue Fire

    And by different, they meant pieces curse words. I think you left out a word here. This story was very creepy. The thought of a world in which words have ...

    Jul 27, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: The Place I Love

    Thank you!

    Jul 27, 2012
  • Poetry » Culture, Satire Re: Talking to the Wall: In Memory of Trayvon Martin

    I know how you feel. This is just so outrageous. I'm offended by the whole thing. I just wish that Zimmerman could be put behind bars and that racism could ...

    Apr 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Mazes, Dreams, and Strawberry Fields

    Beautiful imagery! I loved the natural elements in this poem!

    Feb 16, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Action / Adventure Re: The Funeral

    It needs a little proofreading, but I really like this one.

    Feb 13, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Dad?

    I really like the emotion in this. It makes me feel sad. I feel palpable despair coming out of this.

    Feb 12, 2012


More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes