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I really am loving this! one thing though..can you please describe what the narrator looks like? owo maybe in the next chapter ? :'3

hmm..I am going to edit this..thank you! :D it means a lot to me.It's my first poem so haha.

Ahahaha thank you for the advise and Cupid line came from Shakespeare :p perhaps you should start doing some revising too? :)

Ahahaha thank you for the advise and Cupid line came from Shakespeare :p perhaps you should start doing some revising too? :)

Thank you and I'll try :)

*o* so sweet and lovely,magical even! this is a really great poem SharraeWilson! :D

Wow,I love this poem,it's really good :D But since you're going for a more formal style then try not to use the word 'lame' Wish I could write like this,keep ...

Aaah I see o.o Bring magic into the poem...Thank you!!! :D

Boring? No way,this isn't boring! This is great,the grammar is a lil distracting though,but LOVE! Great work,can't wait for the two guys to come back in! :D

Thank you. :)

Wow,this is such a beautiful poem :) I love the way you put in personification, alliteration.You really used the literary devices to your advantage :) great work,you could really get ...

Oh my god,this is so awesome *o* I don't believe I've ever read a story where people could actually weave water,this is so original and awesome