Misty

It had a very strong ending, the creative use of big letters turning to nearly nothing was fantastic. I loved it.

Thanks, I could possibly revise. But I have a tendency to repeat things, when I want to. I'm not fussed about grammatical inadequacy, I'm not fussed about my readers, because ...

The promised critique(and I am going to make an attempt at harshness to make up for the lovely gush-spiel up there): It was an afternoon in late Autumn. The air ...

LOL. Yes. That would work. :P Good luck!

No. The body would be taken. Immediately. By paramedics. No right-thinking doctor would leave a dead body in a room. It's too dangerous and it's just not right. Unless they ...

*laughs* You're welcome. But I am terminally ill in the brains department, remember that, so my word should not be taken without second opinion.

I actually liked it. It's hard to critique poems, but it had a nice flow. I especially liked the like "let the scissors do the talking."

last thing:: I thought on the whole the story was good, very original. A little bit...questionable, at parts (just ignore my GAh, NONONOing, I told you I am dramatic), but ...

thank you xanthum, for your meaningful and helpful critique. :P

hahaha ok I forgive you

wellll what this was was basically you just trying to express an idea in your head. Not exactly poetic, but I liked the last stanza.

I PMed you on this.

Ahhh, good. I had no idea. It's always good to rewrite things, it hones your skills and expands your writing portfoliom, etc.etc.

Quote: It’s like you just sat down and said, “Well I am going to make Anna, a random, brooding girl, and she will be the Emo One. Then I will ...

I liked it, a lot. Especially the first few images. It had a weak ending, but the overall feeling of it was...er...not "sad" precisely, but it was relatable.