Misty

Okay Jiggy, you won the Misty Lottery. So I'm gonna give you one of my famous, 2 hour critiques. Enjoy! (BTW: prepare for harshness!) There is a place. In this ...

*laughs* Uh...I think uh, that this was just a joke right? and she OMG. she cryed she wuz so happy becaue now zhe ouckd final be poular.. and sol lille ...

Oi Vey. It does need some work. But it's promising. And yeah, I can be a harsh critiquer. But I like you're story, so I'm going to help you with ...

Ergh, I really didn't like this at all. The last bit in parentheses (can you hear me my dear) and after was good. but the rhyming was too much. You ...

Okay, on the whole this was good. But there were a few things: Eying the blinding glisten of her left earring, I indefatigably loathed her. hehe...indefatigably, is it? I think ...

Actually, I thought it was kind of...dull. The paragraphs were long and I found myself skipping over whole bits to get to the end. I was curiously waiitng for the ...

okeydokey, I voted for the boring, no offense intended. However, it does have excellent potential, with a little bit of work. The clouds darkened strangely and Strick now saw a ...

Wow. wowowowowowowowowowow. Wow. And thrice wow. I thought the ending was brilliant. I thought the whole thing was brilliant. My initial reaction is probably unsuitable for this thread as it ...

Not a little confusing, a lot confusing. It made no sense whatsoever. The reader is given the vague idea that the girl said something mean about her brother and he's ...

Ahhh...I really loved it. It's written from a bit of a fatalistic attitude, but that works for this. I've never read a autobiographical piece that I really liked, but this ...

The first stanza is especially good, particularly the last four lines. The second stanza is excellent, the third is decent. But the ending is a little weak, it seems like ...

I'm so sorry, ladydark, if you did lose a friend like this. That is absolutely horrible. Even for something so short, it was emotionally stirring. Honestly, it moved me. I've ...

Hey; To start this off, I definately sympathize with you here. I have also had projects that take extended periods of time. But kudos to you for not giving up! ...

I didn't like it, actually. I thought it was exceptionally cliched with a weak ending. The rhyming felt forced, and this is chock full of lengthy descriptions and I didn't ...

wow, brad, this is like the old poetry i used to love so much, you know the stuff I used to print off and frame and put on my walls ...