Misty

A very good little story. Not particularly poetic in the imagery, but symbollic. to show the pale pink face of hunger. But I don’t flinch, I simply wonder if anyone ...

A good, quick read. Not emotionally impacting, not even unusual, but just simply good. I enjoyed it but it wasn't particularly interesting. I mean, it was, for as short as ...

Okay there are things on both end of the spectrum--that is, you did things right and things wrong. For one thing, I think it was a mistake to have that ...

Sam DID cover everything!!! But you know what, I'm going to review it ANYWAY, because I'm new(ish) and I need to review some stuff before I start posting. And because ...

Mwahahahahaha I am a great pally, it’s true. Also I have a lot of time on my hands. The grassland looks to me it’s sort of like how they say ...

you obviously need to learn the art of subtelty. Being a writer isn't about hitting the reader over the head with a baseball bat to get your message across, forgive ...

the first paragraph was rather cliche, the middle was brilliant, the last was...only decent. With every puff of lethal smoke I'll subtract an hour, An injection in a lonely room ...

Hey: I'll definitely give this a deeper crit later, I'm not feeling well right now and I gt get to bed, so here's a really quick overview: The main character ...

Ahck, I have nothing helpful to say at all. My poetry critiquing skills have regressed abysmally. But let me tell you=this was brilliant. I wouldn't change a thing. You should ...

Okay, I'll explain. The character of Punnet annoyed me. He was a complete jerk, but I realize that you were trying to make him so. The thing that was boring ...

I lost it when I lost my mind, for without hope no mind can be sane. First sentence of this-excellent. Second-wretched. Get rid of it. It deflects from the brilliant-osity ...

The italicized dead gave me a jolt. Very ominous. And a very strong way of starting off the poem. The second line of the second stanza = brilliant. Third stanza ...

Okaydokay, the rhyming was rather forced and cliche, and quite overpowering. Maybe you should try to fit the ideas into freeverse, I think it would be much more effective. Becase ...

I second Re :P and also Snoink. Must always write what comes from the heart, always always. It's not worth writing otherwise. But I also get that you're new at ...

okeydokey, here goes. :P Perched on top of a gargoyle, I feel a warm wind. Coming with the warmth was the smell of burning timber, gas and plastics. House fire, ...