MisterThien

Hello! :) Hahaha, I liked this poem! A very funny ending that I didn't expect at all really :D It made me smile and that's an achievement right there! Keep ...

Hey, Angel! :) When I read this piece of work, to me, it sounded more like a blurb than anything else. Is it a blurb? Or an excerpt from the ...

Heey again, Emiloo! :) Okay, so starting with the nitpicks: You're missing an apostrophe here: They were a colour id never seen before. I think this would be better separated ...

Hello, Milaita! :) I'll start the review with the nitpicks! There is need of a space here: ... face."I'll be back?! What... Replace the first full stop with a comma: ...

Hello, Mares! :) So I'll start with a few nitpicks I found: my parents doesn't don't love me and such. I though this was slightly confusing, so perhaps rephrase it ...

Hey, Emiloo! :) As with every review I do, I'll start off with the little nitpicks that I recognised! So here they are: Its garden s was full of blossom ...

Hello! :) I'm here to review this second chapter now! First, I'll start with the little nitpicks: 'Tommy and I' As me and Tommy entered... Tense change here with the ...

Hello! :) Interesting poem. I quite liked its rhyming scheme; it gave the poem rhythm and made it easier to read, though I did notice a few problems! I think ...

Hello! :) I'm just going to start with the only nitpick that I recognised when reading this piece: You forgot to add the closing speech mark: "Eh-nee-thing. There was another ...

Hello! :) First of all, I think the title should be called "Shannon and I" as that's grammatically correct :D I usually start the review with by highlighting any nitpicks, ...

Hello! :) I'll start out with the nitpicks! Made artificially to be a weapon. "I MAY BE thirteen..." I maybe thirteen years old... Awkward repetition here with 'I look at ...

Hello! :) I usually start a review off by picking out the nitpicks, but I think Blue has already done that, so I'll just skip that! So I quite liked ...

Hello! :) Here are some nitpicks I noticed when reading this story: Missing apostrophe there: I queased as she snapped the creatures neck, I think you mean 'disappeared': Soon she ...

Hello! :) So, I'll just start with a few nitpicks I found and then I'll get onto the actual review! I found that sentence way too long. Perhaps you could ...

Hello! :) At first I had doubts about this poem, but when I had finished reading it, I was just like: "Oh, damn!" I really like this poem. It definitely ...