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Re: The Rage (Chapter 1)
Thank you for accepting my request! So glad you enjoyed the read! I'm assuming you mean shipping Gabriel and Becca. Julian and Becca would be an entirely different story XD ...
Sep 4, 2020 -
Re: The Price of a Soul [Chapter 3.3]
Yeah, I think there needs to be more of a reason for Quinn to be like, 'huh, that was an odd reaction', because to me, nothing really felt particularly odd? ...
Sep 4, 2020 -
Re: The Price of a Soul [Chapter 3.1]
No problem! I'm actually finding it very fun and helpful for myself to critique other works after studying Creative Writing. I've learned a lot so it's interesting to read other ...
Sep 3, 2020 -
Re: The Price of a Soul [Chapter 2.2]
Ah, I see now what you were trying to do with Bell but it still doesn't feel natural. It does sound like you're trying to say something without saying it ...
Sep 3, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 4: Part 2)
Ahh, this site seems to randomly change formatting. But thanks for pointing out the grammatical errors. I'm glad you think my dialogue feels natural. I think it's one on my ...
Aug 22, 2020 -
Re: The Price of a Soul [Prologue]
Ah! Duh! I now realise it was the prologue. I%u2019m an idiot haha. Yeah, that makes the ambiguity make more sense.
Aug 14, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 4: Part 1)
Hello again! Glad I've kept your interest and you're still reading! It means a lot! I capitalised 'the News' because I meant the programme... don't know if that's right? Lillian's ...
Aug 11, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 3)
Woo! I'm glad you got the connection between the aliens and the vampires. Yes, that is what the conversation was actually about (from Gabriel's POV anyway). I always get confused ...
Aug 8, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 2)
Glad you enjoyed the read and thanks for pointing out the mistakes :D
Aug 8, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 2)
Ah, sorry for not replying to this, I thought I had! Thanks for the review and pointing out the errors :D
Aug 8, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 3)
Ah, thanks for pointing that out. Im so used to it I barely notice swearing anymore haha. Ive changed it.
Aug 4, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 3)
Hey! Thanks so much for the in-depth review! The noises at the beginning being grumbles and not screams is important to the story but I get what you mean when ...
Aug 3, 2020 -
Re: Don't Trust the Light
Very creepy little tale. I like the message at the end, but I think it works better with just 'Do not trust the light because it shows the whole picture', ...
Jul 21, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 1)
Glad you enjoyed reading! Thanks for pointing out my errors. I%u2019ll get them changed :)
Jul 17, 2020 -
Re: The Rage (Chapter 1)
Thanks for the review and the suggestions! Glad you liked it and I hope you enjoy where I take the story :)
Jul 14, 2020