MissGangamash

It's been a while, but I'm back again! I don't really know why you put a subtitle to explain this is from Treego's POV when you haven't in the previous ...

Hello again! Nitpicks: “Look, what is it you’re you on about Kernik?” - 'Look, what is it you're on about, Kernik' or maybe better, 'Look, what're you on about, Kernik?' ...

Hello and Happy Review Day! Okay, so I can't find any glaring nitpicks so yay on that! Right, onto the story. I like the sense of unease and danger in ...

Hello again! Sorry for the few days of nothing, got back into writing/editing my own work and I just forgot everything else XD Right, nitpicks: '“What are these stick things?” ...

Back again! I couldn't get round to reviewing yesterday but I'm here now. Nitpicks: “You do know how to address the ruler of Beneos, right?” - the way this is ...

Second chapter of the day! Nitpicks: 'prongued snake-tongue' - forked tongue. 'little documenthadcome through' - spaces needed. 'sitting around twiddling its thumbs' - twiddling 'their' thumbs. 'Treeg

Back again! Nitpicks: 'It wasn’t fair, the way issues just kept springing up around him, one after another, after another, after another.' - too many commas. Maybe 'It's wasn't fair ...

Second one of the day! Nitpicks: 'dragging something tiny behind him that dragged his tiny leg back' - maybe change 'dragged' to 'pulled'? So 'drag' isn't repeated. “Stop!” Chip cried, ...

Here again! Nitpicks: 'He would be so much more use here' - so much more 'useful'? 'It bobbed up and down, which made sense' - I don't think the 'which ...

Two reviews in a row (go me) Nitpicks: 'like a bullet flying from a gun that had been cocked and loaded for hours.' - just 'like a bullet from a ...

Onto the second chapter! First, nitpicks: 'enormously tall bears' - I don't think that's right. Just 'enormous bears' would work better. 'Chip made his careful way to Margo and Bassila.' ...

Hello! I'm here to get started on these chapters! I'm reviewing as I'm reading so I'll just point things out first then give you an overall of the chapter: 'said ...

Hello! I was scoping the Green Room and found this so I thought I'd give it a read and a review. First off, is this real or not? If it's ...

Okay, so I wanted to review something of yours because you've been such an amazing reader but then I saw it was poetry and I'm really bad at reviewing poetry! ...

I'm reviewing as I'm reading so this might be a bit jumbled. But here we go! - 'Life was a labyrinth, was it?' - I think this is supposed to ...