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Re: Pokemon with Adrian
Haha! This was awesome! I ususally copy:Paste it for nitpicks but I really can't find any. This was just awesome! One thing I think you could have gone more in-depth ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: The Keeper of the Necklace
“ Memorise Memorize the contours, the shape of the planets, how they form that almost perfect line . ” The beautiful women woman looked down at her daughter, as her ...
May 26, 2011 -
Re: I Will
Hello, Dreamsingray! I am MilkNCookies, but you can call me Milk. And I will be reviewing your fine, short piece today. Fine for a minute, Pushed down again. I would ...
May 10, 2011 -
Re: Eyes
A single bullet is all that is needed to kill a man. As long as you have good aim, that is. This line confused me a bit. A lot of ...
Apr 4, 2011 -
Re: The words are only rain.
~*~ The door is always open but only a crack, only enough to let in the gold. It will reflect off the bottles , the shards of happiness. The bruises ...
Mar 31, 2011 -
Re: If You Saw the World How I Do.
If You Saw the World How I Do, you would see that a single ice crystal, fallen from the sky, is a world on which I live upon. It melts ...
Mar 30, 2011 -
Re: And I'm Proud
Reach out and touch me. I'm real. Grab a knife and cut me. I'll heal. There's proof I exist, Now you see. Before you make judgements jugments About me. This ...
Mar 30, 2011 -
Re: Stealing Grace (Part 1 of 3)
Hey kathy. You know the drill- things that are corrections are in bold. Part 1: Stealing Grace It was the first day of their Senior Year. Jared Moore rushed to ...
Mar 30, 2011 -
Re: 0.
This is pretty good, but sort of confusing. You use words my poor brain fails to comprehend. Why are you so smart? :D Anyways, I really liked this. I can't ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Grace
Hm. Now I'm going to go read the novella! I'm puzzled whether I like this or not- I'm sort of on the bubble. Let's see how this plays out. Bold= ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: First Love
If I were you, I'd break it up into a ballad. It's a bit hard to read, but never the less I will review this fine poem. First Love By: ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: A dream
This has a bunch of potential, Annabella. I actually think this is well written, though I think it could be better in a poem. These are all things I would ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Carnation Milk
Erm, this is... odd. Maybe not good odd, either. I didn't particularly like this, especially of the language it used. Let's see if we can child-proof this. Carnation milk is ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: The cave neer the baseball feild.
Chapter 1 " d D o you hear that , Ben? " Maggie asks. " Hear what?" He replies. Maggie struggled to get up from her seat to show her ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Here There Be Dragons - 6
MNC, here to review (first)! Chance breakfasted and paid, Hey, I never knew breakfasted was a word! The ensuing hassle left Chance nearly hopping in impatience and myself (in the ...
Mar 1, 2011
