MiaParamore

Well this is extraordinarily short, and the language you've used in writing it is simple, bland, not at all what you want to read in a story most of the ...

Hi there. I am here to review for you today. All the words or letters that I have added will be in blue nad the ones I need you to ...

He was going off to work i n the countryside, i n a small town called Elk Creek, Nebraska. The space between 'in' needs to be removed. What mattered were ...

“Now, I need you teenagers to scram. I don’t want to run the risk of you ,” he pointed a worn finger at Talia, “getting captured.” Just change this and ...

Hi there. It was sweet and short as deafwriter_19 earlier mentioned. As it was short and had not much to tell I couldn't find an grammar mistakes so that's good. ...

Hi Valentine, I am here to review as requested. The story started good but till the middle part I lost interest. the story line is nice and unique. The one ...

Hi it's cool. The dog they had tested on had already had some sort of virus in it, when the cure and the virus combined , it created a disease ...

Hi, I really liked the story and especially the last line. But I have one issue, why did you start this story with a dream in which dad was murdered. ...

Hi, - Character! Helion (I like the name) is our hero, but we don't have any information on him. He wakes up and is immediately shoved into a dangerous situation ...

Wow Plennsterr,your narration style is wonderful. i totally fell for it. Shouldn't you eb posting this in Romantic Fiction? One Problem: You should write the title beginning with capital'I' Like: ...

Hi Ben, So I agree with Attolia in saying that till the second paragraph I was totally exhausted and wanted to get over it. But nice job man. You really ...

The worst book I have read is by an Indian bestseller authgor, Chetan Bhagat. The book's name is 'Five Point Someone'. And you would be surprised to know that the ...

Hi cuco, So you have finally posted your story. that's great and I couldn't edit everything that day as I was busy with exams but now I am free so ...

Hi Wariofart, It's a great story I must say. Zombies is something that sound foolish to me but you have made this so interesting that i can not stop reading ...

Hi mikeetrinidad, So, you have lot to improve in grammar but I really think you can improve. I was keen to read it but I think there are far too ...