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Hi thecamillecalalas! To start of with, I'll say that I liked the simplicity of the poem. Although, I did feel as though it's a tiny, tiny bit too simple. I ...

Hi! As theotherone have said, you really do need to format your story properly. It makes it a lot more easier to read. Since with huge chunky paragraphs, I tend ...

Hi! I quite enjoyed your poem. I liked the topic it explored, I don't think there's been many poems about vegetarianism before. So the topic was quite an original one ...

Hello! I really liked the atmosphere the first stanza created. It had this sort of gentle and calming feel to it. You also wrote it in a way that it ...

Hi! To be honest, I'm not a big fan of the formatting. I like the idea, but, I think that it'd be better if you tweaked it a bit. So ...

Hi Uo! I find that I liked the story even though it's one that I've seen quite a few times, I find that if it's written in the right way, ...

Hi cupcake! You're right, this is quite short. I have seen the what the contest is about, I'd suggest that you put in things about how magnificent and extraordinary it ...

Hi! Okay, I wanted to go over this particular part: “Hi daddy!” his little girl shouted as he entered. “Hey, Griffin, did you finish your homework?” he asked as he ...

Hi! First of all, I have to agree with VuzzyCat and paperbackheart, the girl seems a bit stoic and calm for someone who's about to commit suicide. Infact, when I ...

Hi! Well, I'll start of with the rhyme. I think that the rhyme in this was really, really well written. So well that I didn't notice it when I first ...

Hi! I don't think the repetition in the beginning was necessary, as it didn't really add anything to the poem. If I were you, I'd only use that line once. ...

Hi! With the pacing of the story, I felt as though the beginning and the end of the story was on fast forward. I think what caused that is probably ...

Hi tgirly! The poem's formatting seems a bit spastic and random. Like here: Will never See him. I think that it would've been better if you just place it all ...

Hi cammie! First of all, I'll say that I liked the topic of the poem and the speculation that's presented in it. The analogy in the story between the human ...

Hi! I'd say you got your point across. Or well, I think I did. So, I'll tell you what I got from it and you can decided wheter that's what ...