Metalmauzen

In "A feverish Nightmare" there is no cussing as far as I remember, ;)

Thanks for elaborating my points. As shown: "couldn't have said it better myself"

other than Fuck and damn, no

I'm not going to review this, Bravo And welcome to the site I guess - Metalmauzen

thanks for the review. Tenses are really the thing I have to work on, I tend to change tenses in all of my stories, even after I proof-read them again ...

this is a really interesting piece of text you have here. The blankness of the text leaves me with a ton of questions and because of that I can't wait ...

dude this is pretty long, but I'll read it, expect a review later today ;)

okay, I don't think I can review this. Good luck on writing though. It sounds interesting enough ;)

thanks a lot. This meant a lot to me. Yes it is part of a bigger story and I hope the clichés will be gone after I posted some of ...

it's corrected thank you

This is really something else, I would love to read 300 pages filled with this story.

are you kidding me? I just read your work, it was awesome. You sure have some talent you only need to expand it a little more. Keep writing and try ...

ah thanks ;) I corrected it

thank you ^^ I'm flattered! Yes I will finish this story in some time, I'll post the whole story when it's finished. Could you please tell me where you found ...

that ending is really great, the line drawn between nature and concrete... I loved that! actually the whole poem was great. It flows naturally, good job.