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Sorry had to switch some chapter stuff around because of creating an extra one, so you should move this review to chapter 2.

Yay! I have to say that it sounds like the more recent my writing the better it gets, so it doesn't surprise me that you like this more after just ...

Very pretty poem, I love it. Your descriptive words and metaphors are very well done. Great poem. Keep it up!

Yes, I'd like to know what you think of the changes I'll make.

No prob. i know you can a better hook to the story, you got me with your other writing.

What? Hey, he didn't info dump you so . . . I'm having some trouble with that right now! And I'm not too happy about it.

OK, I haven't edited any since Tuesday, but come back sometime tomorrow if you can, and I should have it edited. I'll try to add some more stuff for the ...

OK, I have a choice to make. I have thoughts in italic the rest of the book. I would like to add thoughts, but for Kanufu there is somethhing in ...

What do you mean by previously? This is chapter three of the story, so you may be confused by that.

OK, I thought those rhymes may have been unintentional, it clears everything up. I like the way you did it. i think having just that one repeated phrase really helps ...

Not to sound dumb, but how exactly were you looking for more fro mthe fighting, like what is it that you want more of? Is it what is going on ...

OK, you guys did your job to good. This is gonna take some time to edit.

I really want to be able to go into some of the lifestyles and more detail of the towns and such and that will require research. luckily though for right ...

wow! Creepy poem. totally didn't see that coming. That was terrifying. very good description, i liked how you wrote it. you had a part you wrote beet instead of beat. ...