Meshalidar

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Good point. I believe it would be steel in his view... or rather appearing that way. But hey, thank you.

I have no name for it. The latin word for 'one' is 'unus'. I just decided to call it one.

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To continue... She tried to break free of his gaze but he held it firmly , Separate ‘gaze’ and ‘but’ with a comma. Replace the comma with a period to ...

Very well done. I like this very much. Its abstract, and that is what makes it interesting and one of a kind. You might want to clear it up because ...

Nicely done. Simple enough, except at the same time very powerful. The depth of it surpasses me, but I enjoyed it. Nice work. A keeper.

Rather... unique. Good read, nonetheless. Simple, but with nice description. Possibly alittle too simple... Nice job.

Thank you all very kindly for your comments... I really appriciate them and they have all been taken into account. All have been used in modifying it, so, again thank ...

This is absolutely magnificent... Catching the attention of the reader right away is a skill that is very nice to have. You, apparently, have mastered that skill. Very nice poem. ...

Nicely done, indeed. Flows nicely. The feeling is so complex but at the same time rather simple. Depth of it cannot be reached by such an infadel such as me... ...

This, I enjoyed... Though faith here took all of my thoughts. Nice job you two. This duet was a smart choice for it came out very nicely. And I'd like ...

A ll the men stepped forward, coming to surround Mael. He had not expected this, but hoped for it to be an acceptance to him proposal. “Well. . . 'pparently ...

And if you notice, I did edit it quite a bit. Like... Deleting the entire thing and redoing it. It's there, same idea, but different words. But thank you very ...

Thank you very much. First off, I do not know why there was that monstrocity of a space there. My apologies for that. Those two fish, the craers and sleens, ...