MerleBlackbird

And then it ENDS?? WHAT??? I love the description in here. At least for me, it paints very vivid images of that basement because everything described is similar to things ...

Dang, okay, this is for someone with a number-wizz brain. I'm glad Ventomology was able to give you feedback on the puzzle side of things, because that went over my ...

I'm getting major - what's that movie called? - VIBES. That movie with the line everybody quotes: "You're killing me, Smalls!" This story 100% has those vibes! At first, the ...

Soooo... I'm not gonna lie, I'm a little disappointed in Melody's behavior here. It feels a little out of character - and yes, I know lots of stuff can be ...

So, to start off-- I love the characters you have here! They're intriguing, lifelike, and convincing. My favorite might be Alainna, just because she has such a steadfast, opinionated, and ...

Well, I'm back. This chapter certainly saw some development. We start off with a gravely foreshadowing dream from August--the aftermath of which leads me to believe August knows more about ...

This story is off to such a great start!! Castian and Quill seem like such great friends. Castian is a little crazy, but hopefully Quill will keep him in check ...

Apparently Mikel is forgetful hahaha And Lakisha is officially my favorite character. This girl got it TAHGETHER. She has her kid, her mom, her dad, her brother(?) all to look ...

Deep, deep, deep down inside, Cyrin is too softhearted for a life like this. I really, really felt for him in this chapter. He seems so beaten down, and I ...

Your images are vivid, your tone flips like a magic dime, and your word choice is great! The way the tone of this story completely changes from the dream to ...

You seriously might be one of the best writers on here--at least of those who have posted something any time recently. Your writing style is EPIC. I would be curious ...

This poem is flowing and vibrant and rhyming and rhythmic! Well done! Your word choice is excellent and the basic message of the poem is clear! Now here's where I'm ...

This is such a cute piece! You seriously sound like a super-duper awesome friend! (Might I apply? Hehhehehe) This is the overall message I got from this piece: All the ...

There are a lot of good things to be said about this piece. Also, there seems to be a number of areas for improvement. Of course these are just my ...

Okay, I seriously got into that. Geez, this story gave me the creeps. I love the way it's written. The entire tone gives off old-timey, simple-life vibes. Everything is described ...