Merkava120

This is a really interesting story. Probably the most characters I've seen in a short story in a while. Like susanne said, you've really got the short story form down. ...

This is excellent writing, and a beautiful story. I'm glad your mom is okay. My mom is a cancer survivor, too, although I was too young to remember it. I'm ...

My first reaction as reading this was just "Yeeee-haaaw!" I love this idea--because it's good, developed, and, best of all, [i]completely original[i]. I've never seen anything like this anywhere befor

Merkava here! I'll jump right into it. I like the character you've created. She knows a lot about the Novites, she knows it's vitally important for her to record the ...

Merkava here. Holy cow, I love historical fiction when it's written this well! That was very, very good. To start with, here are the things I liked most: The Uniforms ...

Really great poem! I did connect with this a lot, especially the "imperfect, as always/but who can get it right?" and the very last stanza. If I take the last ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! Awesome story! You had really great imagery throughout the whole thing, and I didn't get hung up on any clunky descriptions or vague wording as I ...

This is a great story! There are a few things I'd like to mention here. First, I love how you wrote the story in second person. Few authors could do ...