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seriously, i have no idea what i was thinking when i wrote this, i was half asleep and had a dictonary... This is always a bad way to get readers ...

You might want to check out this thread on rhetorical questions in poetry , particularly this quote: Rhetorical questions in poetry must be mature, emotionally gripping, and thought provoking. You ...

P lay on , daughter of the moonlight . ¶ P lay through the night . ¶ P lay [s]on[/s] your gleaming white piano ; ¶ Unblemished , unstained , ...

(NB: A good reason does not include any variant of "I like the way it looks," "other poets have done it," or "it just feels right.") I'd have to disagree. ...

This really didn't do much for me. The message wasn't a new one. It's true that our society is mostly a visual one, but the idea of "inner beauty" is ...

This isn't, like, amazing poetry or anything, but it's cute and it made me laugh, so you get a virtual gold star. :D I really have nothing constructive to add. ...

Woah. WTF. Okay, I tried. I really, honestly, tried really hard to read this. I even downloaded the .doc, thinking it'd make more sense. It doesn't. I think there's a ...

You must l eave at midnight and Vanish into the particles (1) of the moon . [s]Soar above the moon;[/s] (2) It is a divine metamorphosis . ¶ [s]Drop[/s] Stop ...

Tick tock, Tick tock. Time is passing by , And all I do Is sit here looking Out my window , Watching the leaves turn From green to red, Then ...

This is interesting. It's a stream of consciousness, more than a story. It's interesting, like I said, but not the greatest. I think the idea has been used before, and ...

First off, what's with the font? It's really weird. I'm not going to copy edit, but some things I noticed: The infodump at the beginning is a bad, bad thing. ...

8498 SW Fifth Street, Waterloo Warehouse. Six stairs, no railing. The double doors of the entrance were rusted; the glass on either half was shattered and secured by a steel ...

I think that there was some amazing an intense imagery ("pouring acid smoke into your lungs" in particular), I think that this poem would have been better if you took ...

I love pop culture poetry. (I may have made that term up, but whatever.) I enjoy writing it, myself. If you really want to emphasize the band names and song ...

In order of observation: 1. Her description is classic Mary Sue. Cascading hair and multi-colored eyes especially. Most people don't mention the high cheek bones so explicitly, or the specific ...