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Interesting! It has lots of potential to develop. You just have to brush up a bit on your english. You tend to mispell or skip a word. One thing I'm ...

At first I was wondering what in the world were vampires doing in the Quileute lands, And why were the Volturi, of all people, so dumb to do that. They ...

Interesting, but somehow not entirely realistic. A king normally wouldn't be so faithful... especially when there is no child. I think. And he's rather impulsive, because a king can't just ...

Personally, I've done a lot of reading up on the Holocaust. It's a very fascinating but tragic topic. I've had a few ideas about writing on the Holocaust, the Japanese ...

An interesting story, With lots of interesting names, if not silly :) Since the mistakes I could find have been pointed out, I shall not be rude and repeat them. ...

I've read quite a few of your works, And some of them were rather outstanding, While this just so happens not be one of them. She rambles a lot to ...

It was well written, albeit not very original. But still, the execution was good. I was going to point out the mistakes, but it seems that everyone has done just ...

It made my stomach ache to think of that affection squeeze around Brianna’s shoulders, her face glowing with pride, a smug smile feeling like a punch to the gut every ...

*envious* Even a piece that isn't your best work, compared to my best, would still be tons better than mine. Still, I really enjoyed it. Once again, your descriptive skills ...

Hey TRASHYtoni! First off, I'd just like to advise you to keep your title in lowercase. We discourage CAPS in YWS. Italics are used instead :) Truthfully, the moment you ...

I seriously love these kinds of stories. I end up laughing like those crazy maniacs people normally lock up in mental institutions for a long, long time. One thing though, ...

This is interesting. Normally fan fics are based on books and shows, Not really about celebrities and stuff. Honestly, I don't really know what the Jo Bros sound like, Nor ...

Way to honour books! I'm not a poetry expert, But I could still tell that the poem flowed well, And I liked the words you chose. Well done! *claps* I ...

I picked picture number 7 by the way. He had been thrown unceremoniously into the cell, landing hard on the cold stone floor. James tried to stand, but his cruel ...

Well, there's something Snoink may have forgotten to mention. Looks like you're still new to YWS! In YWS, we have an important rule. The 2:1 ratio rule. If you've heard ...