Mcbucketts

Your work is decent but with some suggestions it will be better. In the first line I believe that leap should be changed to leapt. Also try using some stronger ...

I like how like how the song is constructed. While reading it I can picture a group of people that are very close. Also the way that its wrote paints ...

I am very impressed with how the story starts. Also your word choices and your vocabulary is very creative as well. Likewise, the environment at first seemed very chaotic but ...

I have to say your story is well structured and flows smoothly. The dialog is also well constructed and easy to follow. I don't see much needed changes, but I ...