McMourning

I saw that ending coming, but it made me smile. Isn't that always how life works? Your writing seems very natural. Two small spelling changes... I delivered them quickly and ...

Hello, Chulel. When I write my diary entries, I just write what comes to mind, just a stream of my consciousness. I understand that this is your diary entry, too, ...

Hello. I love that opening sentence. We probably all know someone who drives like that. And it sets the tone for the rest of the scene. Like Tommy, I haven't ...

Hmm...I like it. I don't know if the contest has a word limit, but I think you should expand it more. I would enjoy reading about how he got that ...

Hello. I think that you have a nice idea for a story, but it needs work. I know I sound crazy , but it’s true . I feel as if ...

Hello. Laura is right that your poem is great and speaks for itself. However, that does not mean you don't need to proofread. You should always capitalize "I". You didn't ...

Hello. Yes, it is short, but it's a start, and a pretty good one at that. In the colony police station, Jacob Rutherford, police officers working on several murder cases, ...

Hello. Your piece was just the way I like it--short and to the point. As the others have said, it has a surprise ending, which we all liked. I also ...

Hello. I keep rereading it. It was a poem that kind of drew me in. With each read, it becomes better, deeper. I pick up on subtleties that I didn't ...

Hello. I didn't read your earlier chapters, but I understood what was going on. I enjoyed it. When the girls were talking, it seemed very natural. They said some things ...

Hello. This poem really touches my heart. When I read and reread it, I think of the three years I spent with an awesome boy. It seems to apply perfectly ...

Well, hello. I thought it was interesting, but it was not what I expected. You see, I was hoping for a little more math. You mentioned deriving, partial fractions, and ...

Oh, my! When I started reading it, and even in the middle, I had no idea where it was going. I like that about a story, when it twists and ...

Hello. It read smoothly and my mind filled with images of a teenage girl escaping to her roof. Although I don't climb onto my roof, I connect with the girl. ...

Hello. I enjoyed this, even though I haven't read Harry Potter in so long. I think it was written in a different style than Rowling, but I like it. It ...