McMourning

Hi. I suppose these are three separate poems in a collection titled "Garage Sale", but this title means nothing to me. It does not unify the poems. didn't know how ...

Hi. I usually don't read long pieces, but you had no reviews! I assume that you have already handed it in to your teacher, but perhaps you will rewrite this ...

Hi. This seems like something I would write, and I hope that you aren't using people's real names. After all, this is fiction. I cry as I sing myself to ...

Hi. I agree that you need some commas, but I also think breaking it into stanzas will help. I also think it will flow better if you change this. You're ...

Hi. I'm not sure if this is the very beginning or not. If it is, I feel something is missing. Where did she the glass tube? Did she find it ...

Hi. Overall, a very charming poem. I'm not sure was tempting you, but I had something in my life that was tempting. I love you do not say what exactly ...

Hi. The shards themselves jigsaw together to form a story so perfect, you can wait. Giving in, is no longer possible, believing in impossible is not such a lie. Very ...

Hi. I could tell that you spent a lot of time researching and writing. So, I commend you on that. An other was the dot com bubble in the share ...

Hi. her frozen winds lick my bare limbs I like this, because most people don't say that the wind is licking them. So, it calls a new image to mind, ...

Hello! By quite a vivid image of berries you're definitely on the right track-readers love details like that. I commend you for that, but it's not so much the over ...

Hey! And the bowels of the earth I shook There's something awkward about his line. I don't think that using "depth" will help...I think it would be better if you ...

Hey! I liked your poem, because it sort of surprised me. I was thinking you were going to be talking about imaginary friends, not books. But, hey, books are great ...

Hello! I was actually very surprised by how this turned out. I expected something about internet dating, but there's nothing about that in here. The title doesn't work with the ...

Hello! How many summers had he spent here. It's a question. He remembered a...woman....NO....man : old with crinkled, rough feature s like worn parchment, bending over him...Yes...YES.... I've bring b

But still she wanted, nay, needed, the power. It sounds very informal with the "wanted, nay, needed". I'd just write "needed" or "Not only did she still want the power, ...