Mattie

I love love love this part: your indebted sevenfold, star-crossed, heart-crossed, across a cross and splayed across my heart. I loved how you took a simple word and wrote it ...

Well, if that's all you got, it would be wise to lengthen it. If it was just practice, then okay. I think you could get even more practice if you ...

Well, Dusky! This was surprisingly good. Not that your others works aren't, but I really enjoyed this. It flowed together smoothly, and by switching point of views it didn't clog ...

Well, for starters this sounds just like King Kong. You also said he died two times, that could have been some kind of hidden meaning. If so, you need to ...

Well, I didn't really like the introduction. It felt more like you were writing an essay than prologue. As I got into the rest, I found most of it enjoyable. ...

Dusky, you write so beautifully! I love your way of complex, but easy to follow. The only problem I had was that it did have some sort of unsatisfaction. Don't ...

This seemed more like a song to me rather than a poem. I don't know why, it could just be how you wrote it. Aren't all poems a song in ...

Very short, but well done. Your discriptions are good and fit the poem nicely. Very nice rhyming scheme, it explains the poem as a whole and sets a very nice ...

It was Farenheit 451 . I remember reading it in...seventh grade? Anyways, this was quite good Misty Lynn. Not too much to read, but not as interesting as I would ...

If you guys hate her THAT much, stop f**king talking about her. It's not going to help anyone hearing about your pathetic life where all you can do is go ...

This story is much like everyone's when they start writing. I think you know what you're doing you just put it into such a childish form. The beginning is good, ...

I'm sorry, really, but...OMG...you have quite a bit of flaws in your writing. You do have a very good idea going here, just make sure you make it believable and ...

It would be very helpful if you posted the whole thing once you were finished instead of posting only a little bit at a time. You have quite a bit ...

This wasn't bad...but it was weird. Especailly the opening: i woke up with you in my arms with a smile as wide as you on my face. That made me ...

Not the most interesting title, but once I started reading that didn't matter. I really loved the opening paragraph too, but what I really loved was this one sentence: The ...