Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Okay so a somewhat cheesy and romantic letter. Not my area of expertise exactly because I also have no dealings in romance but purely as a letter I think it was okay in terms of the actual wording and structure although at some points where I will point it got super cheesy and that's not a bad thing (I do it all the time) but I am just pointing it out.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Dear Jenny,
It seems so long ago yet it wasn’t. Mere hours ago you still loved me, and I loved you. Not that I don’t love you now of course. But you don’t love me back.
Okay not the clearest start to a letter but okayyy...it works out well enough.
My heart bleeds but soon it will scar and toughen. Even if it will lessen the pain I don’t want that; I want you. You are perfection, once you have perfection it is hard, if at all possible to move on. My first love. My only love. My best friend. Closer than family. They say young love never lasts I don’t agree. I will always love you, even when you have forgotten me. After all we may never see each other again.
That is the cheesiest letter I have ever read and I love it because that's exactly the sort of thing I would write for one of my nocels.
I want to say I am sorry, no, I am not asking for forgiveness I don’t deserve it. I only want to offer an explanation and my apology.
I should have told you and asked for your opinion, I know that now.
That's seems like a smart conclusion there.
Ending #1
It was so cute, I couldn’t help myself I knew you were allergic but I got her anyway. I will name her Jenny, after you. I am sorry I got a puppy.
Love,
Justin
Ouch but I have to agree. The puppy is clearly more important here.
When I told you I thought you would be proud of me, and happy I had finally found something worth doing with my life. Those kids need me, and as much as I would like to bail and stay with you I know I must help them, give them a better chance. It would be selfish to put my own feelings before the lives of those starving, homeless, orphaned and most of all uneducated African children. I will be teaching them all how to read, and do math. I will teach them about life, and maybe even love.
I am sorry, but I have no regrets.
Now this actually sounds like something that a reasonable human would say and do.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Okay so these were some pretty good letters and I have to say the second ending sounds much more like a sane excuse but I actually really like the sheer craziness of the first ending too. It one of those "It's so bad its good" kind of things. And overall this is pretty well done. You also really a good sense of the sort of headspace the person who is writing this must be in.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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