Matthemus

Thanks, it starts out with a more fantasy tone I agree, but my additions take on a more sci-fi tone as it goes.

Thanks guys, this was about ten minutes of writing. Good reviews so far I think :) I guess I really do need to describe the land and people more, but ...

Thanks guys, I know it wasn't the best, it was more of ideas in a style, then a passage of a story. I know it causes a lot of confusion ...

Thanks again, I notice a lot of the things i do wrong, but i often can't fix them because of the way my overcomplicated brain thinks. So thanks agin for ...

Thanks for the review, it really helped me, and inspired me to write the new one. It may be sort of out of place, but it could be an interesting ...

Thanks guys! :D I really appreciate the criticism. I'm constantly trying to improve, and i know my writing is not the greatest but you have helped me, even if just ...