Master_Yoda

Heh, I absolutely abhorred this book. I normally love classics, but I found Fitzgerald's characters to be annoying and unbelievable. The book really had no plot and was mind-numbingly boring. ...

What I meant about from someone's perspective is not necessarily using the "I". Actually, I don't like that most of the time. I mean, try writing in the third person ...

Hey Matthemus, Rubin, and Dreamworx Thanks so much for the reviews! :) It seems that the biggest complaint here is my lack of description of setting and characters. So, with ...

My pleasure. The rewrite is not only much better, but it is actually a remarkably nice piece. Just one bit of advice: You need a motivation for Lainin writing this ...

Hello Again As per your request, here is my edit. I hope it helps. Have a good one! :)

To Jasmine, SilverSunlightX and to avorpianikness, Thanks so much for your your reviews, they are much appreciated. You all pointed out that my ending was extremely brief, so I think ...

Hey oneeyedunicornhunter, You're not alone in being a Dune fan. I have only read Dune, Dune Messiah, and Children of Dune, but I really did enjoy all of them. While ...

My pleasure, If there is anything more I can do to help please PM me. If a werewolf is humanoid, then I don't think claw fits the definition too well ...

Thanks for reviewing Light_Devil :). You actually have no idea how much you helped me edit the story. That piece of advice about changing the "bumped" to "ran" was brilliant. ...

The first point that needs to be made about your story is that it is very hard to read. What makes it so hard to read is the lack of ...