Manny

Hey, Ofir! I'll do my best on this review. :) I nodded, not trusting my voice. My hands clutched at the padded bed, ripping the scratchy cheap paper that covered ...

Yep Twilight definately has its issues. I was swept along at the start, and I still hold it as a guilty pleasure. But after reading all four books in the ...

I think the only reason Stephanie Meyer is so popular is because of the craptastic angst she puts in the books, the mary/gary stu characters, the teeny girl fascination with ...

This was a good read. You've got the problem set up pretty well and introduced the major back story without an info dump. The only thing that bothered me was ...

Wow. That was amazing. I could definitely see that in published work. Aside from some minor hitches, it was great. The fairy stops her chatter and her hands fall to ...

Overall, the piece was good. At first the Doctor isn't allowed in, but once the man hears him say Sarah, he lets him in. He says: "Please come in Doctor." ...

I'm not that great at detailed, line-by-line critiquing, but I can comment on the actual story. I liked the way Chapter One played out, but like Kylan said, you need ...

This chapter was okay, but I didn't like it as much as the others. It might have been because you switched view point. Also, it seemed like you described everything ...

I think this is the best work of your's that I've read so far. Other than some typos, there wasn't anything I noticed wrong with it. I really liked how ...

You dumped a lot of information on us all at once, man. I'd suggest taking all that exposition and turning it into scenes. Show us that the freshmen are having ...

I just read the piece and thought it was quite interesting. There was talk of the baby being the kingdom's only chance, which made me want to read on in ...