Malefica

Thanks for the review! You make some good points and those are definitely edits I will want to implement. I did not know that about tetanus. I don't actually know ...

Haha. No problem. I kinda hate when writers use a huge amount of words like that too. I don't when I'm writing normally.

Also, when they go to his house, I didn't notice that, thanks. that's a formatting issue that happened during the copy paste process ;D fixed it

As I said, it was for school so the large words were necessary. I hate overusing big words too but yunno. Literature class requirements :P Thanks for the review!

Thanks again Storm :D Did my best to fix the errors you pointed out.

Thanks for the review! Glad you enjoyed it :D

Thanks for the review :) I had some difficulty with style decisions, which is probably why the point of view is a little shifty. Trying to get my point across ...

Thanks for the review :)

Alright, that makes sense. Might want to add a clarifying line, but that's up to you. I really enjoyed this :)

Thanks for the edits! If you want to read the previous chapters, the links are up there. Up to you though. Thanks for the review :)

I can add a link to the first chapters, and the following if you'd like Thanks for the review :)

chapter 7

Aaah. Yeah. I meant that at 12:00 the entire world mysteriously fell asleep, even on the other side of the earth. I should probably insert a clarifying line.

Thanks for the review! :) I'm not quite sure I know what you mean. Could you specify exactly what it was you would change? I meant all of the world ...

Here's the link to the next chapter if you're interested: