Maki-Chan

welcome Dood ^_^ Well I have to say, this poem is interesting, and is different from the ususal stuff I read. I have never been good at reviewing poetry, let ...

this was really interesting, and well written. I couldn't find any mistakes. It was very amazing. MORE people should review it. My favorite part was when she thought about the ...

interesting The young badger looked down at his bloodied footpaws that hung beneath the bench he was seated on, observing the great scratches on the chains that held his footpaws ...

huh, interesting. Good word use and it rhymes (WHICH IS AWSOME). I think this might be a tad too short, but that's just me. I liked this. Its pretty nice. ...

Nice poem, now time for the real work....(sigh grammar and spelling) and i see through half closed eyes Capitalize your I but i'm not near surprised Capitalize your I The ...

i like the way you used (_) after a phrase. It was like he was saying the phrase and then thinking of the part in the (_). This really drew ...

W[code]ell this is very interesting, perhaps you could make it longer by describing more, like your dates, the reason you were so attrackted to him, and why your realoationship got ...

well done. I liked your word use, your phrases seemed to flow together very easily. Nice job ^_^ There'd be words of love, of joy. They'd extend to the end ...

Nice word use, though I have no idea what this is eplaining. Perhaps its a troubled person possessed by untamable anger? Or a murder? I like the beginning the most ...

Nicely done ^_^ I like the way you explained her fear to his rage, and then sadenss/pity to his frastration. i wouldn't mind seeing more of this. Perhaps this could ...

hmm... This was interesing. Is this based during the creation of the '13 colonies'? I enjoyed how you made it a jounal entries (I think- if not then I am ...

Cool! You have written this so very well! I enjoyed it. Especially the twist at the ending when he tore the letter apart. Why did he do that? I wouldn't ...

umm... Well I have to point out one thing. You are quite the artist with words; however I am not used to this kind of writting. The only thing I ...

You've done yet another great chapter (Ermm... I mean chapter part) I really liked the way you described the underworld. Like a dock near the sea, and the huge towering ...

Once again good job. I like the way your write your chapters. If only they could be longer. (sigh) Anyways nice job. I didn't exspect that the little girl would ...