MagnusBane

I really liked this! It was funny, and the voice of the main character was very distinct and very... fangirlish. :D I did notice a few things, though. “Shut up, ...

This part isn't bad writing, it just doesn't seem very... realistic to me. Not that ink men are realistic, but the previous parts were so well done it seemed believable. ...

Wow. In the second part I thought the ink man wasn't scary enough, but he was definitely creepy in this part. You did a great job with him, and I ...

Excellent job! This is the best part yet, I think. :) My only question is, where is Bella during this? Wouldn't she be pretty upset if Edward was that depressed?

My biggest question is, why should readers care about this Christopher kid? There's nothing in here that makes me want to sympathize with him. He's a flat character, and there's ...

Your characters are very realistic, I'll give you that. Zi's such a jerk. Why does he have to keep his and Leila's relationship a secret? Is he ashamed that his ...

I'm just not feeling the emotion in this chapter. The main character keeps going on and on about how afraid she is the man is going to whip out a ...

Okay, this was just creepy. You did an excellent job with the emotion in this story and your main character was superb. The way you showed her thoughts seemed really ...

Yes! Voices in people's heads! *high fives* I love crazy people! You just made my day with Twister. :) Ahem. Anyways, the review. Well, your characterization is pretty strong, but ...

She breathes her approval. I kind of know what your meant to say here, but I would choose a different word than "breathe." It just sounds weird and it doesn't ...

Wow. You captured the character of Austin perfectly and the emotion in the story was great. I felt bad for him, and bad for his family, too. His poor mom ...

Well, I really liked this. It was a bit confusing mostly because you don't tell the reader why Eli's there, or what the place is. I'm sure you'll explain that ...

I agree Lucinda, I didn't like the Warriors series at all. A lot of people love the books but I don't understand why. The characters had zero personality and they ...

I'm surprised no one mentioned the Mortal Instruments series by Cassandra Clare. I'm also addicted to: The Hollows series by Kim Harrison The Sookie Stackhouse books by Charlaine Harris The ...

Twilight was just... ugh. I don't understand how people could like those books. Edward is a crazy stalker with control issues. He crawls through Bella's bedroom window and watches her ...