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Re: Wrong Time, Wrong Place, Wrong Person...
I really like that last line.
Oct 31, 2005 -
Re: Innocence of a River Blossom (Short Story)
Its good you realise that, just don't complain on something thats simple to understand, anyway HAPPY HALLOWEEN and all that are reading this check out the art section as I ...
Oct 31, 2005 -
Re: Innocence of a River Blossom (Short Story)
the eyes closing is an action that is taking place while he is thinking, I didn't add it to the paragraphs ot ir would be confusing but if you really ...
Oct 30, 2005 -
Re: Sudden Loss
You know what....when i first wrote this story I always hated the intro because it sounded to descriptive, and I kept telling myself this. I think from now on I'm ...
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: Untitled
This is a very unique story you have come so far with and I really like it just i keep thinking that your character's line seem like they are talking ...
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: "The World" Writing Challenge 10/10
This is a very good description but some reason it doesn't pull me in, might be your language but the beginning line of each stanza in the versus when put ...
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: What I've Become
Spooky story but no feeling of rage that this guy felt
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: Death by WHAT!!?! (screenplay)
Nice work and I like the title
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: A War In Evol | Chapter I: The Silver Eagles
Someone needs a visit from the grammar fairy :wink:
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: Bloody Angels: Chapter Two
Reminds me of the movie called "Serenity" :)
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: Innocence of a River Blossom (Short Story)
Can i get some C&C from people please
Oct 24, 2005 -
Re: One Sunny Day it started to Rain
I agree with emotion_less, don't keep the very beginning unless life depends on it
Oct 22, 2005 -
Re: Romantic Fiction: A Fine Romance
Awwww thats pretty good, just some parts lack feeling and emotion, but overall its good. Keep up the good work :wink:
Oct 22, 2005