Lyrical

Hey, thanks to both of you, I know what you mean. This actually started life as a piece of prose! I wasn't sure if it worked that way, so I ...

Zelithon: Yes, he beat her but he loved her. That is the basis of the idea - he 'cried' love, making it seem false and meaningless with his actions, but, ...

Hey, thanks for all your comments guys! I didn't expect such a good response! To Boni Bee, The line 'Now all he can do is stand and drown' actually carries ...

That's just so effortless. It feels really good to read.

I thought the beginning was really good, really effective. It didn't flow as well towards the end, but it certainly makes you think! It's nice to be made to see ...

Today was not meant to take you away. Wow. That is a really powerful first line. Sad poem.