Lycanstyle01

2 yrs later... omg i write garbage wtf was i thinking?!?

O.K. I quit youngwriters. Someone please close ALL my posts. Everyone is so negatory. I hope this site gets a virus and closes down. :D :D :D :D

You don't know that, Antong. How do you know that this will turn out cliche? Justify your cause. By the way, which song are you doing for English? And which ...

When I tried to copy from word to here, these symbols came up. I am very sorry and will fix them.

O.k. I was lying. I thought you said you wanted me to be nice to your post. Do you want me to critic your story?

I don't find any mistakes. He has revised his story so much, it is close to the "perfect" status. If so, why don't you post his "mistakes"?

This was an extremely good story. The best part of it was the descriptions of Sarah's "good luck". You were creative with some of them.

I think it should be easy to find mistakes AND the resemblance. Not that it matters, but I find some things dull

At some point in the story, I become a bit agitated and bored. Maybe change the plot a little bit? Other than that, I find funny little twists of information ...

You confused me, the reader, a bit in chapters 2-3. I advise rephrasing that. Other than that, I think the plot is very good. Keep up the good plot!

I completely understand the story. Right now, the only thing I should suggest that this should be moved to the "adventure" section.

Toward the end, bad need of commas. Plus, the colon in the last sentence. Revise your grammar.

The plot is similar to when Zeus and his mighty god-friends fought with the Titan's. Not extremely similar, but it has a resemblance.

I'll take your advice.

Yes, establish the setting and more characterization.