Lycando

Sure! Be glad to help :) However I suggest that you still post them on here. So as to get feedback not just from me but others as well. It's ...

I think it would be better if you spaced out you paragraphs, a whole chunk of words like these turns reviewers off. If you edit it and space it out ...

Well in the first paragraph, "part" may have been a little vague. You talk about raising a bow, and then firing an arrow. That's lead to think of a medieval ...

Thanks for the review! Really helpful :)

Thanks for the feedback! Will improve on it for my next part!

Thanks! :) I should really try to write more poem then :)

Thanks for the feedback, and yes I realize that I may have left out some description in certain parts. :P No problem about the harshness, I think that's what really ...

Thanks for the feedback! :)

It's a enjoyable read, the start is good and it's flows smoothly into the second part, which is the dialogue. "Lord Alistair, hm.. sir?" I think you meant to write ...