Lumos

Hi Blou! So this is an interesting concept and I'm not sure I completely understand it. There might be some science-y aspects that are way over my head. I do ...

Hi ryanmakenna, Lumos again stopping by for a quick review. This chapter is a lot shorter than the previous one, and although this one is well-written, I think the first ...

Hi ryanmakenna, Lumos stopping by for a review! This piece is incredibly well-written! It managed to keep my attention and I want to know what happens next. The pacing of ...

Hi EthanHoover, Lumos dropping by for a quick review! I'm a huge fan of short fiction - it can be great practice and a lot of fun to read and ...

Hello SimpleBicycle! This is a wonderful little story you have – it caught my attention and kept me entertained. Overall, this is a great story and I love how the ...

Hi Rosette! Ahh, where do I begin? This story was very well-written and I enjoyed it quite a lot! I love that you have no info-dumps and you never once ...

Hi ajruby12 - Lumos here stopping by for a review. I haven't read the previous parts, so I'm just going off this. First, I would suggesting cutting the size of ...

Hi there Gymnast2801! Lumos stopping by for a quick review, so let's get into it. Alright, so I'll just say I'm not familiar with the Warrior Cats books, but I ...

Hi KayLou, Lumos here stopping by for a quick review. Most people frown upon prologues (I am one of them), but that's not to say they're necessarily bad. Just most ...

Hi Holysocks! You have a well-written piece here. I can't say I know for sure what's going on. My first guess was that Carmen is some sort of god. But ...

Hi MJTucker! You have a fun little story here; there's not much here to critique. You have a good pace and a fun little twist. I didn't see that coming ...

Hi BaileyMatwiiw! Lumos dropping by for a review. You have a good start and I'm curious what's going on at the end. There are a few things I would like ...

Hi Scribbleinks! I'm stopping by with some quick tips. I'm not going to be really critiquing the story plot since I'm not starting at the beginning of the story. This ...

Hi there! Just dropping by for a quick review. I like the way this starts! It starts when the action starts, and that's a very important element in short stories ...

Hi DreamingForever! I liked this story! I'm not much of a history buff, but I do love reading stories set in the past. I agree with MJTucker about the information ...