Lucifer

I'll try and change that last line then.

I'll fix that thanks.

I'm not sure what you mean by saying "control and respect". I didn't just put the words there to have them. I use language like salt. I felt using those ...

It's a story about revenge basically. I'll try and break up the struggle more. jenna: Cunt is a nasty word for vagina.

Oh. I didn't know the "he" referred to his stepfather. I thought the "he" meant the headmaster. That's why I assumed he killed the stepfather.

It seems REALLY unrealistic that the headmaster would kill for a kid he barely knows. (That's what I'm assuming happened). Otherwise pretty good read.

"trage"? Do you mean "rage"? I think there's plenty of rage in it.

Wow that was a fast response. Thank you.

You think the last line is weak? I couldn't really think of anything else to say. Especially considering I'm limited to 7 syllables on the last line.

I didn't even think of all that Quiz. I'll prolly change it to chest instead of head. I don't want to make her miss any shots because it would break ...