Lovekills_period

I absolutely LOVE your description of his eyes. I took the liberty of adding some commas into the quotation here. It is the only thing I could find wrong with ...

It is an interesting attempt at classical verse on mythology. I like it. I will admit shamefaced I got a little lost in some parts. It reminds me of my ...

Denim Sheets and a Twin Sized Mattress? It's a really good title, but a title that I sincerely believe would be nice on a better poem. I love the title. ...

It was a very good poem. As I am a fan, I can't help but draw a mental link to the Phantom of the Opera because of the guy in ...

I like the seeming ice cold tone the poem takes on. I do have a suggestion though. Some punctuation at the end of lines would be better, at least to ...

Is this poem written from a guy or girls stand point? You talk about how "he slips away" but then talk about how "she" is the one the narrorator is ...