LoveableLittleSock

This poem is very bland, are your words are very.. boring. I'm sorry. I don't want to be mean :) You probably tried on this, but the truth is it ...

I'm so confused it's not even funny. Why did the older freak try to kill him? WHY DOES HE NEED CHOCOLATE? 'Cus it taste good? That may be reason enough ...

Sounds like me and chocolate... You used "the man" a lot. Try to use another way of referring to the same character. You spent a lot of time making fun ...

Pablo was so great, I know to be with him was fate. Aww, that lines flows so good with the poem His sweet brown eyes, and the way he had ...

Wow - that was so beautiful. I like how you said how the wind was a man and he was so gentle... aww... You are such a talented poet. I ...

~ The clock strikes midnight, and he doesn’t seem to care or notice. Unless it prompted him to do what he did next. He grabbed me into my arms and ...

.... Gory. Wow. I was breathless when Lent died. I had no friggin' idea. I was like, gasping. Haha. It takes talent to do that, my friend. Oh god. How ...

Ooh! I liked it. I didn't want to stpo reading... I do think that you should look up the meanings of the words that you are unsure of. Like endorphines. ...