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Myth pointed out the errors. I enjoyed this, though. A very well handled story on famine, and its nice to see my country got a mention in there. Well done!

I liked the blue! If she had purple glowing eyes, shouldn't this story be in Fantasy fiction??

Thanks, but I am 14. And I never really noticed the "this morning" bit. As I said, I just wrote it on the spot then handed it up.

a cliff hanger mat? the tables have turned. This was good, although I cant critique cos you have too many

it might just be me, but I think there's too much dialogue in this.

Can I just say I love you? You're writing style is fantastic!! Only problem is, you said they don't have names, but you named them Boy and Girl. That may ...

actually, thats what I had in mind. People write in their diaries different ways. This chapter was written about a week ago and I hadnt seen it since, until I ...

XD sorry guys, I dont intentionally make cliff-hangers, they just happen.

theres no hook, and whats that white box at the bottom? There, I critted, but I cant read Sci-fi or fantasy. You shouldve told me the genre beforehand!!

was that thing a werewolf? Freaky! The disturbing brilliance continues!!

disturbing. . . and fantastic at the same time. Brad, thats you in a nutshell ;) I LOVE THIS. Now to read chapter 2!

House and Garden is a magazine

I enjoyed this, and Im not even a poetry person. It had a very story-like feel to it. It was short sweet and simple. well done

i liked this, very well described. :D

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